broken clock

nothing much .

 

 

Broken on the wall of this store

“Sale broken clock “

-Laughs- who would buy a broken clock?

Nothing works, I can’t tell time so what use am I?

I wish someone would buy me, fix me, and take care of my faults

Why  is  this child staring at me, I wonder if he realizes I don’t work

“What good is a clock that doesn't tell time” he asks 

“No good", his father replies.

I wish I can start moving again, and then someone might buy me

But that’s just wish full thinking. I spend my days on this wall

Not knowing neither night nor day in a endless impasse

but  i still hope that one day time moves for me again.

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I sense your anxed disposition, here, your vexation as temporary as a time scales, I am pleased to feedback, though I appreciated especially, the way you adopted the role of the sorrowful, broken clock, ha ha!! Well done Peter, pen on!

[Peter H]

thank you again for the review my friend ;)

[Robert L.]

Sounds like the deepest plea of a human heart: the feeling of being marred and unusable and the desire to be noticed and edified by our fellow man. Good work here, my friend.

[JenniferMarie]

This is a beautiful poem. I like this story very much. I like that he still has hope and in time, I believe, someone will appreciate him, flaws and all. We are all a little broken, but we are all worth so much still. :) Well written, great job.

[Peter H]

thank you very much mrs.marie :)

[JenniferMarie]

You're welcome :)

[quinfinn]

even a clock that's broken is right twice a day......terrific write here peter, well done!

[Peter H]

thank you :)

[quinfinn]

i see by marie's comment i was beaten to the punch, sorry. i did enjoy the write!

[Peter H]

lol it;s alright i'm happy you enjoyed it :)

[quinfinn]

still lovin it, Peter

[Peter H]

thanks :) quinfiniy

[Marie]

Well, it's right twice a day isn't it?

[Peter H]

i would believe so but only for a second , thank you for the review it made me laugh :)

[unsavable_soul]

Very nice Peter, Bravo!
This is a very original piece to my eyes and mind. Sure the concept of time and relation to self are well covered but this is the first time i have seen it done in this fashion with the broken clock on sale and no one wanting to buy it and also the reflections of the clock's thoughts on self and future events. This is a very profound piece friend.

"“What good is a clock that doesn't tell time” he asks
“No good", his father replies."
Very good line here in the center. It sums up everything while allowing the reader to move comfortably in to the clock's thoughts and telling end in it's hopes and that while broken it is still ready to work again. Often I feel this is a perfect metaphor to our hearts or even lives. Most excellent piece Peter, seriously.
Sincerely
Christopher
105/100
P.s. May I add this to my library friend?

[unsavable_soul]

Oh I am, believe that.
You grasp interesting concepts by the horns often. I have appreciation for your art. Thank you for it's addition to my collection.
Chris

[Peter H]

thank you for the review chris you truly inspire me with your words i'd love for you to have it within your library

[Sami Khalil]

A very good write and concept. I really like your works...:)

[Peter H]

thank you sami i think your work is awesome as well :)

[Sami Khalil]

The feelings are mutual...:)

[The Girl That Let You G..]

I like this, you've actually written a poem on the clocks thoughts. Very nice

[Peter H]

thank you for the review :)

[Designer]

Intriguing perspective using this "clock" creative metaphor. We are all broken is some manner!
The last line really grabbed me. "I'll still hope that one day time moves for me again!"
Incredibly powerful word picture! Where would we as humans be without HOPE! Impressive piece! Thanks for sharing it!

[Peter H]

thank you very much miss designer :) i appreciate your review

[Chris]

a perspective of a clock's thoughts and yet the thoughts fit present economic conditions experienced throughout the world.

[Peter H]

i like what you got from this :) chris