the manikin

a short fun one . nothing to write home about

who are you ?

why did you replace the person 

who was once here ?

i can't see your face 

i only see a manikin 

white all over  immaculately  featureless 

who are you and what did you do to the person 

whom existed  before you .

Author's Note

i wouldn't call this anything great or too profound , its just something i felt like writing .

Reviews

[NebraskaHope]

I love how simple it was and how everything fell together . great job !

[Archangel Gabriel]

IKt is interesting suggesting someone has changed and the protagonist cannot recognise them as the same person. Interesting.

[Baby Ricochet]

It's a good little poem. I like it

[Peter H]

thanks bro

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Well done... its short but not devoid of meaning. It actually is an awesome concept.

[Peter H]

thank you very much ph!

[Infinity Blues]

I do believe this is the first poem I've ever read on a mannequin, that didn't have love as the background writing promt. Its very intriqing.
Questions worth asking. Lol

[Peter H]

i almost never do the lovey dovey stuff i do the hurt ones seldom i believe those poems are too generic

[Infinity Blues]

Very true. And you do write them well dearie :)

[Peter H]

i saw what you did there lol

[SHEEMA HUQ]

An interesting piece Peter, may I recommend that you look at my poem; MANNEQUIN OF SINS, you are the only other poet, as far as I know who has written about this rather niche subject matter :)

[Peter H]

i will checkit out thank you

[Rogue]

There is nothing wrong with this piece. It is short but carries it's meaning well. Where once stood a warm and vibrant being now stands a cold and unfeeling one. What caused this change and where did the person you used to know go?

Nicely done. :)

[Peter H]

that is the question in the poem i hope it can relate because we all lose ourselves once in awhile and from that we need to create a new being from the faceless maniken that is left . thank you for the review :)

[Rhea752]

I really like the concept of this, And i understand what that feeling is like, very sad. I agree with Robert this is much better than you think. Well done. Keep writing!!! :D

[SyberRose]

Nicely penned Peter...it is sad isnt it when people become manikins...as they say beauty
is only skin deep...Rose:)

[Robert L.]

I think the number of comments you've received on this poem show it is better than you think it is. It is good that you posted this. You never know who may relate, or how it may affect any potential reader. Keep writing, my friend.

[Peter H]

thank you very much robert your review is must appreciated