hurt

fighting with a close friend about my vices causes me a lot of pain

I wrote that wrong and I am sorry.
Its that I am hurt, not that I am angry.

I didn't mean to say that I was mad,

instead it pains me that you are sad.

I try and try to do what is right,

but eventually I know that I will lose the fight.

Every day and every second that we are apart,

causes me unspeakable pain inside of my heart.

But whenever we fight, I'm not worried about me,

I just fear the worst that you'll want to give up and leave.

I know I am not the best that I can be,

but someday if you wont give up, you'll see.

That these fights have made me stronger inside and out,

and when we are finally together you'll never have to hurt.

Author's Note

instead of writing it out to them, i took what was on my mind and threw it on here. its simple and boring, but it will do for now.

Reviews

[captain]

I know I am not the best that I can be,
but someday if you wont give up, you'll see.

Those words are really heartfelt, I felt that if a friend is really a true friend. They will see through all the mistakes you've done. Because I know, a friends will steak to you in your hardest times. True friends have high durability in your crisis moments. I find this good and nicely expressed.

[Constance Claire]

Emotions are seldom 'simple or boring'.

Your poem exposes the honest nature of what it is like to be writing to someone in a long distance relationship, and having your words misinterpreted. (I have been there. I know just how hard it is sometimes to put your feelings down as you actually mean them. Not to mention there can be a fine line between anger and hurt, and one can often inspire the other.)

I often find poetry that rhymes to be flowery and over the top, and I often avoid writing it myself for that reason, but in 'Hurt' you have expressed yourself exceptionally well, and your feelings here are so strongly defined that it is easy to forget this actually is a poem.

[Laminators Dubai]

you kidding...
pooja and sandhya gonna cry after listening it...
its simple but explendid!
thanks for being a writer!

[Quill~]

The pain is evident, and expressing it here will do wonders for your heart... but the right thing would also be to tell your friend. This is a heartfelt write, Tim. Keep writing. :)

[Jazmin-Ruby]

Truly capturing! This piece can be very relatable, especially, to those who have immersed into a painful fight, which ends up being a misunderstanding most of the time.

This is my favorite part:

"Every day and every second that we are apart,
causes me unspeakable pain inside of my heart.

But whenever we fight, I'm not worried about me,
I just fear the worst that you'll want to give up and leave."

That unspeakable pain inside the heart you talk about, I know it.