off my skin

one i did about a girl i liked who was....well not worth it really. inspired by skin by sade

De-synchronisation….

Revelations….

Of what has become.

 

There’s No good left in that head.

 the conscience inside is dead.

That’s what its become…..

 

Petit shape and feather weight.

Guilty smile illuminates

Darker tendencies….

 

Transparency in the psyche

Left you read like a book….

No deception here….

 

now I’ll wash you off my skin….

You’re black ink circles the drain

Because girl….you’re not right within. 

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Clever use of words indeed.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Hey I can relate to this! That one chick we talked about remember man? Oh good job bro I liked it. Flowed good and was plain cool. Keep it up

[nigrum homonculus]

i kiiiiiiiiind of remember. memory is kinda foggy. but thanks for reading bro! glad you liked it.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Ah yeah? Well you wrote a poem about it (not this one it was uh.... something letter to liar or something) and yeah man!

[nigrum homonculus]

OOOOOOOOOOH! that stupid lying c**k sucking thunder c**t? yeah i remember her very well bro :)

[Harley (arbiter)]

XDDDDDDDDDD ah man couldn't of said it better myself. I actually started laughing at that.

[koty bell]

this was awesome stuff man great write:)

[nigrum homonculus]

thanks for reading! glad you liked it!

[koty bell]

it was awesome dude thx for sharing

[xxxrawr_friendxxx]

I really like the last stanza. :3 And "Skin" is a pretty good song. c: Great job, bro.

[Baby Ricochet]

Petit Shape and feather weight. Guilty smile illuminates. Darker tendencies. OOH. THat's pretty cool, it's also really sexual. You do know illuminates and masterbates rhymes, right? You should have used it man.

[xxxrawr_friendxxx]

BAHAHAHAHA agreed.

[nigrum homonculus]

yeah it was cool....UNTIL SHE TOLD ME SHE WAS F*****G 15! hahahahahaaha! ah you crack me up man. i'll do one just for you.

[That_Girl]

I agree with Baby Ricochet- that stanza is brilliant. Love this!

[xxxrawr_friendxxx]

Wait... You're girlfriend was 15? I'm confused XD

[nigrum homonculus]

LOL no! a girl i liked was. she'd never be my girlfriend

[Baby Ricochet]

15 years old huh? "OH my god baby please be at least 18." One of my frequently used mantras.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Dude, 15? XD wow no offense virgo but that's an epic fail on your part

[nigrum homonculus]

wait...why is that a frequently used mantra? and harley i'm sorry....she didn't look that age. damn it.

[Harley (arbiter)]

No man I'm not mad, I'm laughing at your fail. :D no offense of course. We all make mistakes. And... you don't know why that's frequently used? O.O

[nigrum homonculus]

i don't....i don't get it. i;m dense like that

[Baby Ricochet]

Of cousre she didn't. She looked like a candy cane on christmas. Remember my poem "Jail Bait" THat's why you pray to the W***e goddesss of animal instinct she's at least 18.

[That_Girl]

"OH my god baby please be at least 18." LMFAO I've had that said to me before... lied every damn time. ;) You guys are hysterical

[SHEEMA HUQ]

a compelling, sophisticated write, well composed and a pleasure to read.