Hades

i thought it would be interesting to tell a story of a person walking in the realms of hades. didn't go too deep into it because you would be sat here for hours reading my imagination.

I wake up on a bed of stone.

Quilts made of dead skin.

The air itself is putrid.

What is this place?

 

The stalactites high above,

Stalk me as I walk this plain of pain.

Catching glimpse of a distant river,

Where the deliquents are baptised in their sins.

 

The scenery is serene. But that’s because,

The dead do not speak.

The mist that clouds the ground,

Just covers up the mortified faces I blindly tread on.

 

Have I not lived life of honour?

Showed my valour in the face of discrimination?

So why am I casted into this realm?

Where the cycle repeats for eternity.

Reviews

[Jerome]

I really like this piece!

You describe it well, it feels dark and terrible without you having to say it. I really like the 'quilts of dead skin', such a morbid and fascinating thing. The confusion of the awakened person, in the depths of Hades, belongs here and is expressed well. For who wakes up in the underworld, damned in eternal suffering, and says 'I belong here?'

I have been working on a short story involving the end of life, and the revelation of waking into eternal hell; was glad to see another authors foray into that dark place. Well done.

[Jarrin]

The line that reads "Where the deliquents are baptised in their sins." Gave me shivers. Love it.

[Baby Ricochet]

I like it. I know about a dozen greek myths off the top of my head and the abduction of Persephone by Hades is one of them. Great right. Hope you win the contest. If someone has a contest for the most swearing in one poem I'm a sure thing.

[nigrum homonculus]

and you sir have given me another idea. thanks man, i hope so to. LOOL why don't you create one for that purpose.

[CH Archive]

Very well done! I wouldn't of know what it was about without the obvious title, but i would still of had gotten the imagary. Very will written. good job!

[Olusegun Akanbi]

Wow! I love this poem. The words were carefully chosen and gives a vivid imagination of the realm of Hades. Good job DatVirgo!

[Tai Ryens]

Such a dark poem with such detailed imagery embedded in it. I love that last stanza, how you question your life and contemplate where you went wrong. I enjoyed this piece much, keep at it!