A dramatic scene

heavily influenced by d'angelo. the last stanza is actually one of his lyrics. i love that artist too much

Why are you…sleeping with my woman?

Why are you…acting like her husband?

Have you lost your f*****g mind?

That’s my best friend and wife.

I just wanna burn my eyes…..

 

Why are you…asking me to join in?

Why is he….asking me to join in?

Have you lost your f*****g mind?

A threesome with my friend an wife?

What the f**k? is this life?

 

Why do you…f*****g continue?

Why don’t you…stop, its that simple.

Theres no respect here at all….

No wonder she never called….

I just can’t believe it all….

 

Why are you…putting your clothes on?

Why is he…putting his clothes on?

Let me tell you whats on my mind.

Im about to go get my 9.

An kill both of ya’lls behind ….

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

It's got passion and anger. Love it. Great job.

[Alana McGuire]

Oh wow, that's intense, for sure.
I hope it's not written from personal experiences; that just wouldn't be a fun situation at all. But it's really great that you can express how you feel with writing. You do it well. :)

[Jorge Martinez]

Not a dull moment here. The narrative flows beautifully, and the passion permeates the poem. Beautifully done.

[XxxModifyTheMassesxxX]

amazing job. i can feel the hurt and aggression. loved it!

[kayla]

Haha f**k ya :P this is great. I love, love, love it.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Haha! Yes! Awesome

[That_Girl]

Haha you were right; I love it. Effectively shows the shock that one feels when they realize they are being cheated on. Would love to read one that is from the wife's POV. Great job!

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Wow! This is raw, intense, and full of emotion!