Electric Eyes

A short, simple poem i really like.

I met you, and was lost

in your electric eyes.

Every soul falls upon another.

Yours fell upon mine.

Reviews

[Eliana Johnson]

Well you could add on to it like you said you don't know how to and nether do I. I wouldn't be able to add on it it but you thought of it you must finish it


oh but I have some cool poems you can read.


and your views can read them to if they want

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

very simple and I love the words you've used to paint this picture. Well done

[Sarajane]

oh this is beautiful!!! i really love it.

[laceyjane23]

this is a sweet simple poem, i think people will be able to relate to it. we have all had that moment when we are captured by looking into the eyes of another!
keep on writibg,
good luck in my contest!
laceyjane

[Nely Amorim]

True words, short and sweet... thank you for enterting my contest, keep up the excellent work !

[Mastermind]

Thank you so much for entering my contest! I really enjoyed the simple but profound message that this poem gives, the pure energy of true lovers united at last. This piece is lovely, keep up the good work.

[Roberta Weth]

Thank you taking the time to enter in my contest I came here to wish you luck and say that this is a lovely poem.
~Bobbi

[Conrad Wrobel]

"your electric eyes"
never heard it put that way before. usually its 'deep' or 'endless' or 'passionate', but i like yours so much more. That is... unless you were talking about a super-hero? o.0
ZAP!

[Lynn Mariposa]

I love this :)

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[James K. Blaylock]

It seems perfect... just the way it is.

[Chloe C. Telles]

I think what you wrote is outstanding and you shouldn't write anymore. Poems like this are very well written.