Escaping the Beast

a man runs threw woods trying to escape a beast that wants him dead.

Running

The man flies past the trees

His heart is pounding

A war drum beats in his chest

BANG BANG

Sweat falls from his brow

Eyes wide with fear

BANG BANG

He slips and falls

BANG BANG

BANG BANG

BANG BANG

He tries to get up

BANG BANG

Too late

The beast has found him

BANG BANG

It's over

BANG

The man is dead

Author's Note

Tell me what ya think, and review is welcomed.

Reviews

[Roger Ferguson II]

.....i need to remember the info for this account lol.

[DeathByChoice]

I liked the beginning, but I thought the ending was a little too literal and fast. "Too late/ The man is dead." Just kind of boring, like stating facts instead of telling a story. But the overall story line seemed like a very good idea, just written a little off. :)

[Dreamer (Kristen)]

I like it, it's dark and very well written, though personally, I think you should lay of on the: "Bang Bang's"
But hey............. That's just me :)
Loved it,
Sweet dreams,
Kristi