Hands

Dedicated to the muse who revived this bout of writing

Sun-kissed and nimble
drumming on the counter top
Mesmerisingly floating around
Animating a story

Combing through luscious locks
Touching that beautiful face
Envy blooms to be those hands
Desire bubbles to hold those hands

Strong, surely
Capable, evidently
But..Strong enough to hold me?
Capable of touching me?

And willing…?

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

A natural flow of words, presenting strong thoughts of another person who inspires what is dearly appreciated and .. needed. Special.

[Vol]

Tan-90,
A hope and a dream we all have... One love shared by two people. A rare thing indeed.

If I might suggest, good verbs don't need crutches, especially those that end in "ly."
"Strong, surely
Capable, evidently
"Strong, surely
Capable, evidently
But..Strong enough to hold me?"

"strong, capable,
but enough to hold me?"

An element of poetry is economy of words. When the muse wakes me to an old attempt, I always lose half the words... keep writing, editing until there is not one left I can do without and still say what I mean.
Vol

[Sami Khalil]

I like the cascading thoughts of romance; a special muse can fire up our imaginations.
Lovely and evidently capable.