Falling down on me:

How's your life going?

The rain,

       now falling down on me,

              like my shameful past.

 

Yelling and screaming,

       now pouring over me,

              like my fears, anger, and pain.

 

Regretting words,

       running in my mind, over and over,

              like a broken record player.

 

The night,

       creeping closer and closer,

              like footsteps in the dark of a loner.

 

The creatures,

       crawling out from the cracks,

              like my secrets.

 

The world,

       falling and crashing down on me,

              like everything.

 

EVERYTHING,

       FALLING DOWN ON ME!

Author's Note

IDK. Just read it and give me advise on it and tell me your favorite stanza. Please and thank you! :>D

Reviews

[Sarah]

Well this just full of beautiful similes! =) My favorite stanza is, without a doubt, "The creatures, / crawling out from the cracks, / like my secrets." That's beautiful, dark, and symbolic. The idea of all of your secrets visiting you at night is scary and something that many people deal with. Very well written!

[David]

Awesome write. Very good visual symbols. The whole thing gives a very good effect.