Walk On The Beach

a morning on the beach

I walk slowly on the beach

My head full of thought,

Listening carefully to the soft song of the waves

I felt like time was  paused

As if i had all the time in the world.

I wish it could last forever

That soft morning.. on the beach.

 

 

Author's Note

i'm trying my best on the peom..i'm just a beginer!

Reviews

[Faelyn ó Cuilinn]

This is really charming. It has a simplicity and ease to it. Makes me want to take my toes in the sand and feel the "squidgy" texture. :) Good job!

[cest la vie]

Growing up at the beach, I feel this. You say a beginner, will my friend you are well on your way. Nicely done!!

[Brianna Brie]

This definitely has the blissful appeal of the beach. Well done!

[MarchAprilMayJuneJuly]

wow...then you are a great beginner!!! i thought it was cool cause you just focused on this one moment of harmony, which made it like a dream. when i say it was like a dream, i mean that it was so peaceful and calm. when i read this i felt soothed.. nice write!

~may

[lauren emily]

A beginner? Heck! You're better than me! You did a really wonderful job on this!
Keep up the awesome work,
Lauren

[Angel's Lady]

Very nicely done! And that is just exactly how walking on the beach is...it is something you don't want to end! Great write!

[James K. Blaylock]

I really enjoyed this piece, it's truly peaceful. Sometimes, we could all use a walk on the beach, to clear our foggy minds.

jkb

[Charles D. Moorer]

Nice start, I feel this one, that perfect time and place.

[Bill Grimes Jr.]

Great job Alyssa. Your thoughts and deepest feelings are portrayed to the reader and we are free to decipher the words as they strike us each individually. The beautiful thing about poetry.......it moves across waters of culture, history, emotion, and human instinct. As you develop your craft over the years, the mechanics will become natural and effortless. Well done my friend.

Peace,

Bill :-)

[M00nZ0mBie69]

I really enjoyed it. It had no rhyming, but that was the beauty of it. Very vivid imagery. Great job! = ]