Save me

A person is broken

As you can see, I am fading away,

A beat up heart that won’t stop bleeding.

A torn up sole with things still to say,

My mind isn’t leading.

I’m lost and can’t find my way,

I have lost my voice to say.

Can you put me back together?

Will you stay with me forever?

Author's Note

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Reviews

[PloughBoy]

A lovely little verse, Sarah, one that seems to seek healing for a broken and shattered soul. Ah, but therein lies the rub, for you have written "sole" instead. Is this to indicate a sewing up of this tormented soul, a "repair" of sorts? Or, was it simply a typo, and confounded confusion between the very different meaning of a homonym? Only you would know that for certain, as it could be interpreted both ways.

Good work, and a lovely presentation.

[Chloe]

Nice write, though I found one error that may not be an error if you did this intentionally:

A torn up sole with things still to say,

You said "sole" (as in the bottom of a shoe) instead of "soul" (as in the human consciousness) but I suppose the bottom of a shoe would work in this piece. I'm not sure whether this is a mistake or not. Anyway, good write and kudos to you!

[Sarah]

Thanks no it wasnt intentional I will correct that