Disdain

 

 

 

There has to be gain

From all this pain

Humanity is vain

A disease spending disdain

 

Our disorder is genetic

We are truly pathetic

Civilized or synthetic

Never wholly poetic

 

To change course of our fate

To break our traits

To find love past hate

We could be great…

 

But hurry cause soon it will be…. Too late

Reviews

[The Elder Pine]

I think the content is good but the rhyme scheme may need work. I feel that some of it is forced and does not entirely fit and bogs down the flow a bit, It is a good piece however.

[Joseph - Michael]

Yup, that's true on how the ways the things are going lately... Not trying to sound so negative or anything like that, but it's a bit too late for most people who are just blinded by their own sins...

Anyway, it's a pretty good writing you got there...

[Wolfwind Words]

Oh humanity is not that bad Pinky!
you just riding a surfboard, they go up and down the waves. you in the down part.
Have faith and you'll ride it back up and away! :)
I got your hand!

[Legion]

Love the progression of this. The rhyme (for me) is a bit over the top, but it gets the point across so it was well worth it. Good write.

[~*666 Draven Von Tepes ..]

very nice poem :)