Fiery Anger

I'm angry at you
I am pissed as hell
The fiery side starting to swell

Go ahead ignore me
Pretend you don't care
Now the dark side is starting to flare

I want you to notice
And treat me with respect
Not throw me aside with needless neglect

Want the same care
That all your friends get
Don't pretend I'm insignificant, I don't exist

Shutting me out
Not talking for days
my mind seeing red in an aggressive haze

I don't pretend
That you aren't there
I show the world that I do care

I give you respect
That I do all my friends
On this issue I will not be flexible or bend.

You could act
Like you do care
That in your life, as a friends, we do share

I'm not asking
For you to love me back
Only acknowledgment the friendship, that fact

Wow, is all I can say
Being mad and fiery at you
Brings on  a whole new meaning to attitude!

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Experimentation with color, I like it, although I think this poem could be good without the use of color, I find it almost distracting but it does put a good emphasis to it. The flow isn't perfect but that almost adds to the anger behind the poem that is doesn't matter about flow because anger and rage are often expressed erratically.

There are some grammar issues that hindered the flow a bit for me. In the third to last stanza you have "as a friends" the plural with "a" throws it off a bit. And "Only acknowledgment the friendship" doesn't quite sound right.

Good poem though. Many people can relate to it.

[NightsShade]

Hmm, I've never seen a poem constructed this way... Interesting. In my personal opinion I would change a few words. Like in the first stanza a would change 'The' in the third line to 'my', but I suppose minuscule things like that don't really take away from the poem or the quality of your work. I have to say that I don't really understand the meaning of the different colors... I don't see much of a pattern. Ahh, but this was some good work, I defiantly felt how pissed off you were. I also felt as if you were also trying to express a feeling of helplessness, you've trying with all your might but still you're not succeeding with whomever you're angry at.

[Frantzuu]

very Passionate, I can see anger, frustration. The first two stanzas makes you want to keep reading more. The rhyming of the at the end of each stanza also worked well in this poem.
Great poem, i like it and keep up the good work. :D

[MissWordSmith]

love this. Love the first stanza!!! great writing! passionate. anger live - beautiful.

[The Analog Kid]

Wow, passionate, pissed, but again, I like the three-line stanzas! Is this new or old? I espcially dig, "my mind see red in an aggressive haze."