An Undertakers Tale

written for creative poetry

This adventure begins in the dead of night
As the moon shines full with twisted delight
Across water logged mossy hallowed ground
Specters glide shadowed not making a sound
Vaporous black forms silently drape the land
Inviting you to take their formless hand
To become part of their sepulcher domain
Where even the undertaker is insane
As Death's hammer strikes its deceased nail
Leaving rotten buried skin and entrails
Postmortem bodies hidden under headstones
Decaying to nothing more than gnarled bones
Apparitions  search through the land of the dead
In hopes of creating a fresh and new dirt bed
So frightened of this sight you grind your teeth
For next your body will lay lifeless beneath


 

Reviews

[Crowley]

Holy s**t.....this is a well crafted tale of more than just malevolence. Gripping from line one, the rhyming works well. This plays on the fears and questions of death and dying on what might happen post mortem....great writing and a wonderful tale for this time of night. Fabulous, I loved it.

[Hello, Goodbye]

awesomeness

[Ruth]

Goodness! You know....what does happen when its our turn....this really makes me think...BAM! And its delivered right there! Awesome!
xx

[Ria Benthil]

Despite how I shy away from comparing poets to others, it reminds me of Edgar Allan Poe's classical style of melancholy and gothic qualities. However, there is a unique voice; a voice that concentrates on the fear of death. The poem captures a vivid narrative about an undertaker of whom is constantly around death, and perhaps did not give it much thought until recently. The details are beautiful, and it is enriched with macabre touches. We are all afraid of the unknown. Death is the personification of that fear.

[Poeticadia]

A very macabre scene that awaits us all! Great word choices and chilling effect.

[Ladysue]

this is dark and chilling picture...but you did it very well...

[Robin]

wow , an intense bit of writing .

[Coyote Poetry]

You could expand this poem into a story. A lot of interesting detail and situation in this short poem. The poem is direct and to the point. A very strong ending to a excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

I liked this, I read it first, then I read it again, and I visioned I was in a boat heading to hell, and it was the warning sign I was reading before I go in. :-)

[Tina Kline]

A very dark and spooky tale with grand nightmarish imagery! I think this a delightful and fun piece in its gruesomeness. Excellent job on this poem!