Recollections

Story poem for M'Lady Helen

 

Recollections

 

 

As twilight falls the curfew sounds.

Within the walls guards make their rounds

The oaken gates are barred to all

The city waits for night to fall.

 

The wisest men stay safe at home

but rogues and lovers choose to roam.

While honest men are fast asleep

 around the darkened streets they creep.

 

Convinced that darkness is their friend,

 an ally on whom they can depend.

 But they are wrong the moon will rise

expose them to the watching eyes

 

of guardsmen who are in control

The city watch is on patrol

to watch for those who break the laws

and are abroad without just cause.

 

I am the one they failed to catch

The city guardsmen could not match

the speed at which I could make off.

They simply were not fast enough.

 

They did suspect but could not prove

that I enjoyed forbidden love

I will continue so to do

 as long as I am able to.

 

There’ll come a time I have no doubt

when youthful energy runs out.

Then I will become respectable

Always obey the curfew bell

 

But I will have fond memories

 of all the girls I used to please

When I was young and able to

 the things I can no longer do.

 

The curfew sounds as twilight falls

I can still hear the watchmen’s calls

But I’m as sure as I can be

 that some young fellow much like me.

 

Is doing what I used to do.

Beneath the moon there’s nothing new.

Hot blooded lads will have their way

 but if they’re caught there’s hell to pay

 

28-May-08

 

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Reviews

[Carole]

Another wonderful write. Perfect rhyme and rhythm as always. Tells a cute story.

As twilight falls the curfew sounds.
Within the walls guards make their rounds
The oaken gates are barred to all
The city waits for night to fall.

Well written. Your choice of words-perfect. :-)

[cmaynard]

I really love the image that the first four verses created in my mind, something experienced then I'd be guessing, or a powerful imagination. I was just able to picture it all in my mind so clearly, maybe I am remembering some eventful late nights....
I did have some issues with sixth verse I think that something is wrong there, "the" should be "they" I think and some of the punctuation in later verses seems a little of to me, breaking the flow a little. Not sure though if this is simply copying error when posting here.
Also I really did enjoy the closing verse it was a great ending to this piece, I really did enjoy it!

[Jane Doe]

Great poem. The pace and rhyming are so flawlessly done. I really enjoyed this one. Though, I enjoy all that you write. But I especially liked this one. Great job!