Night owl for M lady Lena

sonnet in tetrameter

 

 

 

 

Night Owl

 

The sky a layer cake of hues

from darkest greys to palest blues.

The sun has set and daylight fades.

The birds have sung their serenades.

All noise is hushed as darkness falls.

The shadows vanish from he walls.

As curtains drawn against the night

deprive them of the yellow light

 that’s cast from windows far and wide

 Confining shadows to outside

The living rooms kept warm and bright

perhaps because men fear the night.

But I do not I am content

 the darkness is my element.

 

28-Jun-08

 

http:// blog.myspace.com/poetic piers

Reviews

[Lena M. P.]

I loved the poem. So few people notice how many colors there are in the night. They only see the darkness. But it has its own kaleidescope all its own. Imagery was beautiful.

[Christopher Marlowe]

I like the gentle rhythms and rhymes--also the way you've included baking, music and colors. The ending is especially potent.
;-)

[Tovli]

a wonderful use of imagery--nicely done. tovli

[Adela Muresan]

The passing form day to night is very well described, making it seem like the world changes trough simple events.

The last line is the best one.

A.M.

[Michael]

Very strong imagery and pulls the reader right in. Although it fits the tetrameter, I would rework the first line as it is a bit stilted compared to the rest, something like "The light-streaked sky of layer cake hues". Should the "he" in line 6 really be "the" ?

[Donald Meikle]

Well writ and perfectly said