Earthbound for M lady Siddartha Beth

 

Earthbound

 

 

The geese fly south and leave behind

 the bitter winter storms to come

 The gather, circle then they fly

 a vee formation in the sky.

 Exchanging leaders on the way,

almost as if a single mind

controls the flock mysteriously.

I watch and weep as they depart

I have no wings, I cannot fly.

I am earth bound, I can’t escape

 the snow and ice which will confine me

 with just my books for company.

Until my feathered friends return.

Their honking cries for which I yearn

will rouse me from my somnolence.

Alerting me to their presence.

 I take my ink block and my brush

 most carefully no cause for rush

.Inscribe my thoughts in black on white

 to signify my great delight.

In my own style of poetry.

To hear again the geese converse.

Not in the style I wrote at court

 but poetry of a simpler sort.

To prove I have not lost my skill

 and dare to hope I never will.

Until the day they bury me

I will be writing poetry.

 No longer in the kings employ

I use my leisure to enjoy

 the use of my ability.

To write whatever pleases me.

 

18-Jul-08

 

http:// blog.myspace.com/poeticpiers

 

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Reviews

[David Lewis Paget]

I love that, Piers. It has a mournful note which fits well with the metre, and brings home that sense of loss when the geese fly south.
A couple of typo's - l.3.- the'y' gather; and a full stop at the beginning of l.19.

'I have no wings I cannot fly.
I am earth bound I can't escape'

Do you think the above lines could be improved with a comma after 'wings', and another after 'bound'???'
(Orl roight - Oi onlee arsked!)