Reciprocity For Fantasy Knight

poem in rhyming quatrains of Iambic tetrameter form

 

Reciprocity

 

My image as a macho man.

Depends on leathers and tattoos

 but if you choose to you can

see below the surface view.

 

The image you choose to project.

Serves the same purpose to protect,

the inner you from public view

You only show what you choose .

 

We all select a mask to wear

 because we simply do not dare,

Display our insecurity

 for each and everyone to see,

 

It’s not an easy thing to do.

 I can learn to remove the mask

when you have proved I can trust you

and answer all you care to ask.

 

But dare you do the same for me

 and show you trust me equally.

Because my friend until you do

 I cannot place my trust in you.

 

8-Aug-08

 

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Reviews

[Bonnie]

Well done. You manage to follow a structure while using the words and meaning effectively!

I like the mask and image concepts. Trust is certainly the core issue.

My favorite lines are:

I can learn to remove the mask
when you have proved I can trust you
and answer all you care to ask.

[Alessander]

The mask theme reminds me of the Eliot quote "we must prepare a face for the faces that we meet" and I like how the tatoos and leather boots act as a sort of mask. In fact, I would kind of like the poem to kind of loop back to that idea, but perhaps that's too formulaic. Nice work.