Rules and Rulers

poem

 

 

Rules and rulers

 

Bureaucracy has quietly

displaced the aristocracy.

Who wielded power openly

The bureaucrat rule secretly.

 

What seems to be democracy

 is now subverted constantly.

Countenanced by apathy

Because the people cannot see.

 

The government machinery

 which is kept hidden cleverly.

Is not the way that it should be.

The dead hand of bureaucracy.

 

Controls it very thoroughly.

Should they decide to disagree.

There is no way that they can be

brought to account effectively.

 

I do not ask you to agree,

 but to consider carefully.

Only the possibility,

we are ruled by bureaucracy.

 

15-Oct-08

Reviews

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Very powerful and true words. Bravo on this one. I really liked that you had all four lines of each stanza rhyme, I think that really sets the rhythm in this piece. Your poetry definitely has a fantastic flow.

My only suggestion for this piece is to change up and delete some of the punctuation. I don't think a lot of the periods are necessary and in some instances, such as the transition from stanzas three and four. I think by adding a period and separating the two lines into different sentences, it creates a snag, a stumbling block in the flow to the reader. Even though the two lines are in different stanzas, I think the punctuation should be deleted. It's not necessary.

All together, another great piece! I'm liking your style.