Self Condemned

poem

Self condemned.

The sound of silence echoing,
beneath an unforgiving sky.
This is the place of reckoning.
All my past sins parading by.

I am abandoned and alone.
As I know I deserve to be.
Is there no way I can atone
for things I did unthinkingly?

Must I endure this misery
behind the walls which I have built.
Condemned to watch eternally
the evidence of my past guilt.

But love can reach you even there
Love can absolve you of your sin
and rescue you from black despair.
But first you must invite love in.

Love holds the key to set you free
from self imposed imprisonment.
Accept love unconditionally.
Release from your predicament.

You're not as guilty as you feel.
You are no worse than other men
Why should you then try to conceal
your guilt.. It's Time to start again.

Absorb the lessons from the past
Resolve this time you'll get right
and in due course you'll find you've passed
from darkness into bright sunlight.

27-Dec-08

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Reviews

[Syke]

"Accept love unconditionally. " I think has 9 syllables instead of 8. "Acc-ept-love-un-con-dit-ion-a-lly" is how I'm reading the line, but I could be wrong.
"Resolve this time you'll get right " is 7 syllables, but I assume it's supposed to read "Resolve this time you'll get IT right" which is 8 syllables

Overall, it's an amazing poem and I really like it. It speaks of something almost everyone at some point feels and the imagery is excellent. I love how you keep the lines simple, but deep.

[Meradee]

At the beginning it illustrates very well that what some people feel, the despair, the loneliness, the guilt. I could almost see myself back in that little room with the unforgiving sky, as you said, and remember how hopeless it was. Then in the next part you said, 'but love can reach you even there...but first you must invite love in.' I love this because it is so true. I hope that this poem will give the hope to those that are going through this. You have written this beautifully.
Pepper...