My time for Jake Sverdlek

sonnet in tetrameter

My time

Hoar frost on trees can imitate
the snow white blossoms of the spring.
On this I choose to meditate
to clear my mind of everything.
The whirling thoughts which madly dance
and try to hold my interest.
Cannot disturb my quiet trance
they cease to spin and fall to rest
My mind is clear as a deep pool
reflecting nothing but the sky.
The placid depths are clear and cool.
I'm only conscious I am I.
This is my time to simply be
If only temporarily.

2-Jan-09
http:// blog.myspace.com/poeticpiers

Reviews

[Salvatore Buttaci]

A great poem, especially the last three lines.

Sal

[J. A. Svercek]

The name in the title is sort of similar to mine. Hmm.

These lines seemed off to me;
"My mind is clear as a deep pool"
"This is my time to simply be"
because single-syllable words sometimes have inflections, and the way I read it the meter didn't seem quite right.

This was quietly contemplative and really progressed well overall, a very enjoyable read.

Thanks for writing,
J.