PUZZLED

PUZZLED

The peacock parades exquisitely.
Displays the glory of his tail,
the hens ignore him easily.
This bold display was bound to fail
The peacock has misjudged his time.
The hens aren't ready to be wooed.
Although he thinks he is sublime
it's not the time for hens to brood.
He's young and inexperienced.
As yet he does not understand,
his tiny brain still hasn't sensed.
The hens not he are in command.
The females don't appreciate
his urgency he'll have to wait.

20-Jan-09

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Reviews

[R.S. Wilder]

LOLOL!!! A simple pleasure to read. I loved this. I think I need to have my husband * ahem * read this.

[Frank F. Atanacio]

puzzling, but effective... nice write I enjoy these types of poems.. :)

[revenant21]

I loved the comparison. good job, my friend!

[Emmie]

Wow, I know first-hand how teenage guys can try to make a move too fast. I love the comparison of a teenage boy to a proud peacock. I had colorful and vivid imagery. I read through it once, understanding every aspect of it clearly. Congrats!

[Ron]

I love this sort of poem that magnifys small events. Nice peek at human adolescence too. My tail feathers failed to impact millions of times. In fact they all fell out! Super. More please!