Hot Pursuit

Dorsimbra challenge entry

Hot Pursuit

It's true: Some do achieve their cherished dreams
although it's usually by accident.
Despite their clever plots and plans and schemes.
What does it matter if they are content.

For circumstances intervene.
Life's in a constant state of flux
your goals must change as you mature,
Sometimes your dreams are put on hold

When caught up in the ebb and flow of life
at times we still have to go with the flow.
At other times we find we fight against
the flow still in hot pursuit of our dreams.

Dorsimbra

20-Mar-09
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Reviews

[DanaRegen]

Poeticpiers,
Thank you for entering this in my contest and good luck!
It was lovely, in order to accomplish your dreams somtimes you have to be a little sneaky, and or go with the flow. So true indeed, once again fantastic poem.
-Dana :)

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Ivor, there is still time before winners are selected, probably this Sunday, to make some corrections in the
syllable count of the third stanza. It is blank verse but also, like stanza one, iambic pentameter (five pairs of unaccented/accented syllables: a total line count of ten syllables)

[Poeticpiers]

I honestly don't know but I will check

[Mark]

According to Sal's definition, aren't the 1st and 12th lines supposed to be the same?

[Helena]

Oh nice dorisimbra for Sal's contest. Much enjoyed by me! ~ Helena

[Syke]

Great poem, the slightly more flexible structure was fun to read while still keeping consistent. No typos, and I'm assuming the syllable count was supposed to go 10-10-10-10/8-8-8-8/9-9-8-10, or else you need to work on the last two lines (or I need to learn how to count). I really liked it overall, but the last two lines seem a tad bit awkward. I can't really place it, but it seems to be especially strong in the last line.

[Frances O'Neill]

Nicely assembled! I like the type of poem, it leaves more ease of flow for the writer!