Unwarranted disrespect

 

Unwarranted disrespect

 

The bards of old are long forgotten

How did this happen to men

 Greatly respected and when.

Did they begin to lose their high place?

I find it hard to bear.

Men who we should revere.

Have been relegated to the past.

Discarded overcast

By poets whose words will not last.

 

Englyn Penfyr form.

 

18/10/2009http:// blog.myspace.com/poeticpiers

 

Reviews

[Tate Morgan]

hOPEFULLY WE WILL ENDEAVOR TO WRITE SOMETHING LONG REMEMBERED eVEN IF WE AREWN'T
taTE

[David Lewis Paget]

This is an old Welsh Bardic form that I've read about, but never actually seen. It was only recently that I discovered that the main difference between English and Welsh poetry was the fact that the English count stresses, whereas the Welsh count syllables. As I have always counted syllables, instinctively, I find it fascinating, especially as I had a Welsh mother. Perhaps it's in the blood after all ?

[R.R.Louderback]

I love the message of this poem. I have not yet studied this new (to me) form, so I can't comment on how well you conformed to it.

One negative, the punctuation in this poem is very confusing to me.
I would place a period at the end of line 1
I would remove the period after line 3
Lines 6 and 7 seem to me to need no punctuation
In line 8, I would put a comma after discarded.

Of course, punctuation and capitalization are matters of considerable controversy among poets. Please take my suggestions in the spirit given... that of admiration for the effort.