Unforgettable.

narrative verse

 

Unforgettable.

 

I remember, I remember

Every year in November.

The night I saw a young boy die.

Every year I wonder why..

 

Could this death have been prevented.

Yes if people were contented.
just to stand and watch the show

instead running to and fro

 

Throwing bangers at each other

 and in general causing bother

Demonstrating lack of sense,

 careless of the consequence

 

 A firework set him on fire.

The flames spread quickly rising higher.
In his panic he chose to run.

The last thing that he should have done.

 

It was the last mistake he made.

By the time we rendered first aid.

He was burnt from head to toe.

We knew it would be touch and go.

 

Despite the efforts of a nurse

 his condition became worse.

He died before help could arrive.

There was no way he could survive.

 

On Guy Fawkes Night I stay indoors.

I think I have sufficient cause.

I can remember vividly

 a small boy dying tragically.

 

I remember, I remember

Every year in November.

The night I saw a young boy die

 every year I wonder why.

 

26/10/2009

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Reviews

[R.R.Louderback]

I haven't thought of Guy Fawkes in years...this brought it back instantly.

Good form, the rhymes couldn't be tightened with a monkey wrench (that's a compliment).

I seemed to stumble on the scansion of the 4th stanza, but on examining it can't find the precise cause...you might read this aloud and see if you have any difficulty negotiating at that point.

[Jasmine]

this is so well written and touching. i love the way you've incorporated the traditional 5th of november lines...really sheds a new light on it. beautiful and tragic. great write :)