Morning Hymn

Awdl gwnedd Welsh bardic form

 

Morning Hymn

 

Gladly do I greet the dawn 

a new day born for me to see.

The dawn chorus fills my ears.

Banishes all fears: I’m free

 to raise my hymn of praise.

To the suns rays. I ought to

in gratitude for the sight

of morning light. So I do.

 

Awdl gwnedd form

 

07/11/2009

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Reviews

[Dillon Cotter]

This is a bright fresh write. So vibrant and excellent. Great job!

-Will

[Sam Freeland]

I enjoyed the originality of the large print and your joy expressed in the poem.
When I can still write a new poem almost every day for years, I get to appreciate
Writerscafe even more; and you do the same, giving the new young writers an example of
how to spend a lifetime doing something worthwhile. sam at eighty

[Lilith]

This is a very good piece. However, I did have a couple of problems with it.
Why is the font so big? It doesn't fit the piece. I know a little thing like that shouldn't matter, but every tiny thing matters in poetry, because anything can symbolize something.
Also, I did not like the repetition of the word dawn, especially in lines so close together. If they were spread out, I wouldn't have minded. But with them being so close together, it seems rather ... lazy. Overall, it was a very good piece!