Saving Face

senryu string

Saving Face.

 

i die honourably.

committing hara kiri

erases my disgrace.

 

only a coward

evades responsibility

 for his past actions.

 

honour demands

 I must voluntarily

 draw my blade across.

 

cut from left to right

die slowly in agony

suffer stoically.

 

.until a good friend

strikes off my head: sets me free

 from my misery.

 

seldom seen today.

 but in the past the only way

 to correct mistakes.

 

to die honourably

 committing hara kiri.

erases all disgrace

Reviews

[Mai Aliza]

In th Uk do they write words like "color", "colour" ? Just wondering, anywho, great job, I like the repeat of the stanza at the end

[Katie]

This poem caught me off guard, I really liked it. I found one minor error, with honourably- I think you meant 'honorably'.. Regardless, this was amazing. Great job!

[Tate Morgan]

A fools errand to give your life for disgrace and a cowards way of not facing humiliation I say