Put up or shut up

story poem

Put up or shut up.

 

I chose to take a shortcut through

A graveyard at the dead of night

It was not the wisest thing to do

Although the harvest moon was bright.

 

I had reason then to fear

The wrath of the uneasy dead

 

The path I chose was broad and wide

I knew that it would lead me to

an exit on the other side.

But my belief would prove untrue.

 

I had no reason then to fear

The wrath of the uneasy dead

 

I did not think it would take long

.Twenty five minutes at the most

I quickly found that I was wrong

My path was barred by angry ghosts

 

I learned that I had cause to fear

The wrath of the uneasy dead.

 

Although my path ahead seemed clear

I found I could not move ahead

I was paralysed by fear

I could not see I could not hear

 

That was the night I learned to fear

The wrath of the uneasy dead

 

I could not move until the sun

 arose in all his majesty.

And bid the angry ghosts begone

His warming rays had set me free.

 

I know that I have cause to fear

The wrath of the uneasy dead.

 

Although I swear my words are true

His is a tale I rarely tell

No one believes me if I do.

A memory clear as a bell.

 

Reminds me that I have cause to fear

The wrath of the uneasy dead.

 

Would you believe me if I said

That I had been terrorised.

By vengeful spirits of the dead

Or would you conclude that I lied

 

And that there is no cause to fear

The wrath of the uneasy dead.

 

Would you accept a challenge to

Retrace my route at dead of night

Because my friend until you do

You really cannot claim the right

 

To say there is no cause to fear.

The wrath of the uneasy dead.

 

Sunday,3October2011

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Reviews

[Ruth]

I enjoyed this immensely love..reminds me a little of Robert Frost!
Sublime use of wording and flow and deep imagery, felt real and I loved it!
xoxo

[Akshat♥]

I loved it...so amazing..
Its something so different..
You have expressed your feelings very well...
at the end it looks like you are shutting it up..
Keep writing:)

[Greg the Bard]

This is one of your better runs of the year. I love the meter and the flow. It is just at the right time of the year and carries with it a story unto itself. Great write.

[Jackson Krauss Blind Pa..]

The way you show the changes, the growth of unease, and the breaking of belief is what makes this poem the bright burst of power that it is. Great work, buddy!

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I like the repetition of the two lines..and subtle changes in them..good narrative story that flows along nicely..