What's Mine

I was just thinking...

Please just try to understand;

I'm only doing the best I can.

With everything the way it's been,

I don't see how you can expect me to stand.

I get knocked on my a*s again and again.

Pardon me if I need a distand land,

far from you--my one-time friend,

because I simply have no defense

for the attacks you have planned.

 

Active or passive, your role in my demise,

I can see the satisfaction behind your blue eyes.

There's not time, I now realize,

for the what, where, how, and whys.

Carefully, I choose my final disguise

to run incognito on the paths you provide

to a place beyond your flimsy lies,

shady mind,

selfish fights.

Goodbye.

Reviews

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"Active or passive, your role in my demise,
I can see the satisfaction behind your blue eyes."

Mm, it's amazing how selfish people can be, yes? I mean, just a total disregard for another's feelings... You've captured the feeling of the betrayee (as opposed to the betrayER XD) very well here.

[R J Askew]

This amazes me as even more than the previous poem I read of yours this captures how I feel about a former friend who, out of some megalomanic paranoia, insisted on maligning me. All very nasty and draining. The only solution is to cut them off I fear. Totally.

[Lyrical Love]

Girlfriend this is genius! Once you get to this point-your free!!! I love the truth expressed in this write/song.

Carefully, I choose my final disguise

to run incognito on the paths you provide

to a place beyond your flimsy lies,

shady mind,

selfish fights.

Goodbye.

[Charles D. Moorer]

Nice Piece!

[Kristin Brecoe]

bloody brilliant! =P The flow the rhythm the wording. WONDERFULLLLLLLL. Hmmm...Now I'm not sure what to say. I can't say I'm hungry, I just ate...

I think I'm thinking too much. And would this be about the guy or the girl? The picture makes me think of the girl... But I wanted to be sure.

I really don't think I have much to say...it's pretty selfexplanatory...and I like it! Nay, adore it!