NO more

read it plz!!!!!!!

Raining on a sunday night

Hoping wing to grow

Yet even if it

Flows

The rain will weigh

Me down

I'm not allowed to smile

No more

Not allowed to laugh

No more

And finally

Not allowed

To love no more

 

Reviews

[Aehr]

I really was drawn in to this piece. I found it very interesting. I love the way you describe the wing which cannot flow because the rain will weigh it down. Its beautiful. Just absolutely.. stunning. I enjoyed this.. a lot! The emotions were stunningly portrayed.

Gotta shelve it!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thanx Rhea!! Im rly happy you enjoy my poems

[Aehr]

o come on! they are spectacular!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol thanx but i know some of them arent great lol I wrote most of them im niddle school

[Aehr]

I AM in middle school! And they are great for middle school!!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol niiiice :-)

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

sounds like you got beating down, don't let no one take your joy away, I enjoyed the poem though it made me very sad

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'm glad you liked it! :-) I know many of my poems are sad but my aim is to make ppl feel and since u hv then i have succeeded in my aim

[afra]

aww ..beautiful...good job

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

aww thanx! :-)

[♥ Kinnixk]

I love it :D beautiful and simple.
Is it "allowed to smile"? Just wondering. :)

[Abbie]

beautiful poem hannah! sad, yet beautiful. the emotions that you can plainly see in this poem really reach out to the reader! the flow is great along with the imagry :) fantastic!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx so much abbie! im glad you like it

[Abbie]

your welcome! :D