a falcon(bird) tale

inspired by rumi,its all about ambition of bird(or you can say mine :)) to fly high

 want to take flight, want to be lost,

A falcon ferocious, flapping its wings,

Want to be guided by gusts of breeze,

Want to break free, want to be limitless,

Want to explore outside, want to dive deep inside,

Want to take flight, want to reach so high so that from there from there all landscapes look same,

Have dreams of moon in her eyes,to fly heaven high,

Want to leap fast in cool waves,want to cover ice mountains,

Want to be vagabond searching road that has been less traveled,

Want to move constantly until reach of glory.

Author's Note

its all about ambition n struggle to reach at top

Reviews

[Dana Alsamsam]

that sentiment of struggling to the top is something i can definitely relate to; good job portraying that idea! the alliteration was also wonderful. my only criticism would be to make your images more vivid and strong since you choose to use images in this piece. good luck with all your endeavors and do big things!

[prashant harsh]

thankx foh reading n for useful inputs :_

[Rhea752]

I love it!! The struggle to be free and make it to the top!! This made me want to go out and do those things!! And I am NOT a nature person Lol great write Keep it up!!! :)

[prashant harsh]

thnx :)

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

Me always wondered how it would feel to be able to fly, seems like it might be fun.

Good Job

[prashant harsh]

thanx

[SyberRose]

Nicely done...Enjoyed reading...you could probably shorten the one line but other then that...
a nice write...:)

[prashant harsh]

thnx i'll take care of it nxt tym :)