Brown Eyes

When i looked into those eyes...

I didn't know what was to come

 I was clueless about the future

And thought we'd never be done

When i looked into those eyes....

Those beautiful brown portals

My stomach filled with butterflies

And to me, you weren't mortal

When i look in those eyes now....

All i see is the hate

You don't even speak to me

And i long for a clean slate

Because when i looked into your eyes

I felt as if in a dream

And i want to feel that again

I NEED that tender gleam

Reviews

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. remarkably expressive and beautiful ... moving beyond measure ... i know this feeling and sometimes my head spins as i wait impatiently to be re united with my soul mate ... we had a dream ... our company ... which is now publishing ... and he's nowhere to be found ... it's so sad ...

[akapr17other]

I would like to know who this is about if you'll tell me. Good ideas that are carefully served to the reader in a four course piece. Good work.

[Moflo]

Again very nice flow and rhymes. Another great poem. Good job.

[GreenSkeleton16]

very good. ive definitely been in this situation many times...

[FleetingReveries]

Loved the rhyming pattern, although quite simple, you executed it perfectly :) I cannot rhyme well to save my life! The voice of the poem was also lovely, conveyed the love and hate beautifuly :)

[Marie Harrison]

The heart has hardened it seems. Loved the style and voice of this writing. Nice!