dreams of freedom..:)

life isn't about destiny..but about the journey that gets us there..

There is a dream i wish to live,

Come hear it as i sing,

I sing the song,the song of glee,

While screaming aloud "yes, i am free"..

When i breathe,i feel the breeze,

I feel the freedom around me,

Taking the flight of my fantasy,

Cant stop cause of a broken dream..

There is a kingdom were i wish to live,

Were happiness and peace always outlive,

Sweet and pleasant is the wind around,

All i hear is the birds which sing aloud..

Wish to swim deep into the sea,

Discover all the thoughts within me,

Swimming along with fishes of blue sea,

I wish to find the pearl called "destiny"... 

Author's Note

please do review my poem and help me improve on my work:)))

Reviews

[Dayran]

I'm sensing a feel of engaging the body, physically in the rapture of possibilities that we encounter. It certainly speaks of discovering the dream in living experience. One would have to be firm in one's resolve and to return into accord, notwithstanding any temporary setbacks. An inspiring poem!

[GridLok]

This poem is quite beguiling in its liveliness.

[futurepast.]

I like the motions, sounds and imagery of freedom and dreams in the poem. A very light, bright and colorful write, which are exactly the aspects of the Freedom itself.

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Beautiful Dreaming destination we can see the kingdom while closing eyes ,, Nice Imagination and narration....

[((Teenage_Poet_Loser))]

i like it =D it is reaaly well written... i am not the best with rhyme poems.. infact have never written one =]... but yeah... i just feel like when u write with rhyme sometimes it can get restricted.. thats why i use free style or what ever it is called =D