Thin Air

When you knock, ask to see God – none of the servants. - Thoreau

Hypnotized with life.

Baffled by strife.

Breathing thin air.

With a desperate flair.

Not unequivocally right but reasonably fair.

Searching for lost humanity.

Victim of my own vanity.

I stood at the edge of a bifurcated canyon.

Seeking my higher companion.

In a faltering voice, I cried out, "GOD, WHERE ARE YOU?"

A booming, thundering reply echoed back, ...

... "I COULD ASK YOU THE SAME QUESTION ..."

Author's Note

“The echo is, to some extent, an original sound, and therein is the magic and charm of it. It is not merely a repetition of what was worth repeating in the bell, but partly the voice of the wood; the same trivial words and notes sung by a wood-nymph.” - Thoreau

Reviews

[Neville]

Deceptively deep but well worth the dive and delve... the trick is to create some white space between fair and searching... and again between companion and in... Yep deceptively deep but well worth the visit.. I just wonder how many others are gonna find themselves asking the same answers..... Nice one Pete... N

[Pete]

thanks Neville. i can see a natural break there to pause the flow as you suggest. it's not so much the asking that concerns me as the response Lol ... :)

[Neville]

It aint all about da bass is it.. Its all about da response :)

[barleygirl]

I love this. It's the perfect combination of serious deep delving & tongue-in-cheek spoof on our human tendencies, such as questioning God (which strikes me as a funny, audacious habit of ours). It's all about expectations. When we stop carrying our expectations front & center, then it doesn't feel like we need to question God so much, becuz faith is about surrender (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Robert Trakofler]

that's just not fair he's omnipotent! seriously a very nice rhyme and flow to this. I have spent a solid many years without myself so I'm throwing no stones brother Pete.

[Pete]

therein lies the problem - we think we are too! we also love to cast stones but he's got a better aim. thank you 'Good' Bunny ... :)

[Robert Trakofler]

LOL you got a good point