Total Eclipse

Most men lead lives of quiet desperation and go to the grave with the song still in them. - Thoreau

there's never a stone around when you feel like throwing one

no one to hold your hand and call you 'hon'

no pop up timer to tell you when your goose is done

no clowns to add to your twisted fun

only bobbies nearby when what you really want is a gun

no sly words come when you need a pun

no scale will tell you, "stop, you weigh a ton"

no trophy to raise when you think you've won

you're out of hamburger and you've still got a bun

you discover that you need new sneakers when you finally get up the energy to go for a run

ho hum

there's just nothing new under the sun

like an empty bag of chips

you can't tell day from night in a

total eclipse

Author's Note

"What lies behind us and what lies ahead of us are tiny matters compared to what lives within us." - Thoreau

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This poem is a collection of well-pumped thinking -- snappy statements that relate to everyday life immensely while being stated in unexpected ways. Pop-up timer! Stop-you weigh a ton! Out of HB, but still have a bun! This is the kind of creative thinking that makes your writing unique. I love the rhyming, but a couple times you let a line go on & on, rambling that could be pruned a touch. This reminds me of those who still sit around bitching about each dumb empty gyration (eclipse) the trump camp does these days when we could all start contributing to an overall change in tenor instead. But he taught everyone to foment so it'll take some time for a new routine to take hold (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Pete]

hmm, lol. at least trump keeps us entertained if nothing else - he's got an awfully big pair.

[Einstein Noodle]

dang! everyone has one or two of those .... moments .. but this is a bad day for sure ... i like most that there is humor and cliche' and punning going on but it is a really difficult frustration and depression behind it ... its in my face enough to have to say .. i disagree ... each moment is mesmerizingly changed from the last ;) ............. really enjoyed your "Total Eclipse" ... and the Kinks!! great band and song choice .. takes me back sir .. waaaaaaaaaaay back
E.

[Pete]

lol. wow, i guess this stirred you a bit.

"The thing that hath been, it is that which shall be; and that which is done is that which shall be done: and there is no new thing under the sun."
- ecclesiastes 1:9

the kinks are classic of course. oh that sir raymond davies ... :)

[Einstein Noodle]

yes well ... i am not one to argue with Ecclesiastes .. but none of us are old enough to experience the whole go 'round ;)

[Pete]

lol. you 'da man e. ... :)