This piece resonated some what with me. It's a puzzle that could have multiple meanings I feel. Most of your poetry has that quality to it, which I tend to admire. I love when art is ambiguous and leaves it up to the person to find their meaning of it. To challenge the reader to not just think but feel as well.
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
i've learned a lot here in the cafe and continue to learn. i usually start off a write with a very .. read morei've learned a lot here in the cafe and continue to learn. i usually start off a write with a very specific meaning in mind but i've discovered that my writing style is more emotional than logical like me. like the impressionist, is up to the viewer/reader to draw their own conclusions and fill in the blanks. i used to get mad at first when people didn't get what i was trying to say but then i realized is better for them to decide. two people can look at a piece and have very different thoughts on it. neither is write or wrong - is whatever one feels or thinks. they can draw their own conclusions as to meaning or intention and interpret however they like. with this piece i started out thinking about how there's a lot of construction taking place in the city where i live and whenever they dig, old cobblestones and trolley tracks from a different era are exposed which got me thinking about progress. each generation places their stamp on life solving the same problems that have confronted man but in a different way. then in the last line i totally veer off "track" and place god into the mix - he's always waiting for people to get to where he wants them so he sits in a different kind of traffic wiating. also the more progress man makes (technology, etc.) it seems the further away from god we're getting. entreprenuers who invent new technologies and make a lot of money and usurp power act like god. so you're absolutely right in that there are often multiple interpretations possible. so as i'm writing i just go with the whatever thoughts and feelings i have. thanks ... :)
This piece resonated some what with me. It's a puzzle that could have multiple meanings I feel. Most of your poetry has that quality to it, which I tend to admire. I love when art is ambiguous and leaves it up to the person to find their meaning of it. To challenge the reader to not just think but feel as well.
Posted 4 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
4 Years Ago
i've learned a lot here in the cafe and continue to learn. i usually start off a write with a very .. read morei've learned a lot here in the cafe and continue to learn. i usually start off a write with a very specific meaning in mind but i've discovered that my writing style is more emotional than logical like me. like the impressionist, is up to the viewer/reader to draw their own conclusions and fill in the blanks. i used to get mad at first when people didn't get what i was trying to say but then i realized is better for them to decide. two people can look at a piece and have very different thoughts on it. neither is write or wrong - is whatever one feels or thinks. they can draw their own conclusions as to meaning or intention and interpret however they like. with this piece i started out thinking about how there's a lot of construction taking place in the city where i live and whenever they dig, old cobblestones and trolley tracks from a different era are exposed which got me thinking about progress. each generation places their stamp on life solving the same problems that have confronted man but in a different way. then in the last line i totally veer off "track" and place god into the mix - he's always waiting for people to get to where he wants them so he sits in a different kind of traffic wiating. also the more progress man makes (technology, etc.) it seems the further away from god we're getting. entreprenuers who invent new technologies and make a lot of money and usurp power act like god. so you're absolutely right in that there are often multiple interpretations possible. so as i'm writing i just go with the whatever thoughts and feelings i have. thanks ... :)
What a poem Pete! Awesome...modernity needs modern shifts and transformation...to evolve it is a must and key...brilliant poem :)
Posted 4 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
4 Years Ago
thank you for sharing. life and technology are evolving so quickly these days that it makes my head.. read morethank you for sharing. life and technology are evolving so quickly these days that it makes my head spin. there's something new and better or improved before you can even get the old box open ... :)
I love reading, writing, music, nature, God and feeling emotion, not necessarily in that order. To me, these things go hand in hand. My favorite writer is Henry David Thoreau. I think he was a geni.. more..
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