Adiaphoria

We may not arrive at our port within a calculable period, but we would preserve the true course. - Thoreau

in a disheartening synapse of emotion

an overspreading parting of the sea

love failed to bridge the gap

ash by day and soot by night

never arriving at a promised land

Author's Note

“Wherever a man separates from the multitude, and goes his own way in this mood, there indeed is a fork in the road, though ordinary travelers may see only a gap in the paling. His solitary path across lots will turn out the higher way of the two.” - Thoreau

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

The right path is always the one you choose. There is a reason you choose that one. The reason may not be evident immediately, but eventually it will become clear to you. It is said that love is the answer, but one must ask, "then what was the question?" Always thought provoking, Pete. Lydi**

[Pete]

an intricate matter as you challenge. guess i accomplished my goal if it made you think. now you've got me thinking too. thanks lydi, happy new year ... :)

[Lisasview]

Choosing the correct path is not always easy... But hopefully we learn by our mistakes..Enjoyed the read..
Hi Pete, finally posted Stripteaser ...one I have been working on for 6 long months..
Lisa

[Pete]

thanks lisa. keep well ... :)

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome dear Pete..

[Betty Hermelee]

The music certainly sets the mood for your poem; it sounds disjointed, atonal, chaotic... and more; It also seems like the path you embarked upon was extremely disjointed like the music, perhaps because you were uncertain about your emotions; your mind have been unsure of what path to take; there was a split in the road and I believe you took the right one; Perhaps you lost a love; you split like-the sea; and you were not able to bridge the gap in your love; you might have blamed yourself and that's why" you'll never arrive at the promised land"
Nice write Pete!
Best, B

[Pete]

wow, I'm impressed. You read between the lines and pretty much nailed how I was feeling when i penned this. you even took the time to listen to the accompanying song. you possess keen insight. must be the artist in you. thanks so much b. ... :)

[Betty Hermelee]

Wow! What an amazing review Pete, love it!
Best, B

[John the Baptist]

Looks like the last thing Pharaoh'a soldiers saw.

[Pete]

as well it should have been. thanks j. ... :)

[Sami Khalil]

Not sure about the concept of neutrality sir or straddling the fences. Man must stand for something or on something; must support a cause, a country, a flag, a truth, a mission, a God or not, good or evil and the list goes on.
An excellent take on that.

[Pete]

"live for something or die for nothing" ... :)

[Sami Khalil]

Now, I agree on that. Wow

[lightsong]

Good Evening from here my ever intelligent friend~

Walk in virtue and no matter how many cross roads will appear, You will reach the promised end. no doubting and no duality, when we fall into this trap, we will lose our right path.

[Pete]

trying to be intelligent usually gets me into deep trouble. you know what the king does to those who ask too many questions. i can't argue with what you say. it takes faith to walk in virtue and trod its road but the rewards can be immeasurable. thank you muchly dear sweet poet and deep-hearted friend ... :)

[lightsong]

We will fall, our knees will bleed, our legs will hurt, our hearts will cry and our souls will get tired... but people like You and Me, will keep walking and never stop.

Don't try to be intelligent, because You already are a one, my very spiritual kind-hearted friend :>

[Ken Simm.]

Yes by way of agreement, empathy and praise for both subject and manner.

[Pete]

thank you dear poet, writer and photographer. to empathize is the highest of callings. happy new year! ... :)

[Mk.t.g]

"love failed to bridge the gap
ash by day and soot by night
never arriving at a promised land"
Loved these lines! There is a much deeper and darker feeling to this writing, and I really admire your talent, Pete! Thanks for sharing!
Mk.t.g

[Pete]

thank you Mk.t.g. you're too kind and you're correct - this one different than my usual. is just a hobby ... :)

[Mk.t.g]

You're Welcome, Pete!