Down At The Shore

My life is like a stroll upon the beach. - Thoreau

meet me down at the shore

we'll drink sand and eat water

combing for glass as the breeze murmurs, "daughter"

skimming rocks and praying to the sky

wondering why

no one holds an open door

for tidal truth at its wading core

as waves go in and out forevermore

souls dancing whilst our bodies die

filling the sea with tears we cry

with a seaweed necklace, you wear your black dress

time and gravity will take care of the rest

as eternity takes its best guess

reaching for more

down at the shore

Author's Note

"The sea-shore is a sort of neutral ground, a most advantageous point from which to contemplate this world. It is hard to forget that which it is worse than useless to remember." - Thoreau

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I think I'll pass on the drinking sand and eating seawater. If that's required I'd just as soon stay at the gulf eating crawdads and boudin, drinking beer and playing my guitar. In fact the latter almost sounds like a better plan, jambalaya and conch salad sandwiches with hot sauce, but it isn't dying I'm envisioning but living. As for women, I've only got one to worry about and she's worth every note. An interesting write but it sort of lost me in the progression.

[Pete]

“It is appointed unto every man once to die, but after that the judgment.” - hebrews 9:27. however, my muse and i agree with you - "When it's time to die, let us not discover that we have never lived." - Thoreau

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Hopefully God won't be too harsh on us wretched, wicked, evil sinners. I'm just a kid at heart in an old man's body.

[Pete]

"Do not be too moral. You may cheat yourself out of much life, so aim above morality. Be not simply good, be good for something." - thoreau

[Fabian G. Franklin]

"Do not be overly righteous, and do not make yourself too wise. Why should you destroy yourself? Do not be excessively wicked, and do not be a fool. Why should you die before your time?" Ecclesiastes 7:16 Solomon

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

amazing writing. the repetition of 'down at the shore' was very satisfying. it was superbly written.
the way the persona describes the beach and himself as not being separate is a beautiful way of thinking. i certainly feel a spiritual connection with the sea and the sand. the placid atmosphere is divine. the female persona, a tantalizing figure who the narrator invites is mysterious and graceful as the waves.
there is a lot to unpack with thi work. i had a hell of a time reading it.

[Pete]

thanks for the shared insight em. it is meant to be mysterious to make you think however you like and to take you there as well.

[Patricia Wedel]

I love the Shore in Winter when the Wind sings J'e t' adore.... softly, Pat

[Pete]

... and sing it does in the utter desolation of the season ...

[Ken Simm.]

What an amazingly beautiful write. I can say no more.

[Pete]

hmm. mòran taing ken,