Prelude to Eternity

As if you could kill time without injuring eternity. - Thoreau

standing 'pon a steep, muddy bank

hands and soul acquiver

a misguided almsgiver

i tossed a black orchid into the brown river

it had no choice but to go with the murky flow

but wouldn't you just know

it got hung up on a fallen tree leaning over a stubborn, unwilling rock

so i took the sad moment of my life to take stock

my faith and these obstacles doing their best to stand the test of time

seemingly amounting to a hill of beans

the tree a mere sliver

until the powers that be and the spirted breath of life will to deliver

putting an end to the whole stubborn, misguided prank

Author's Note

"Time is but the stream I go a-fishing in. I drink at it; but while I drink I see the sandy bottom and detect how shallow it is. Its thin current slides away, but eternity remains. I would drink deeper; fish in the sky, whose bottom is pebbly with stars." - Thoreau

Reviews

[Relic]

Excellent poem with some good rhymes thrown in. I like it. Listening to sabbath I can see where Spoonman from soundgarden came from. :)

[ETERNITY]

I followed the black orchid in the brown stream,
Sensing vague nibbles on my backside when floating,
On my front side when I flipped over, then I saw,
All the hundreds, thousands of bits of the past
And the ones underneath trying to devour me

[Pete]

great poetry as you picked up on my line and finished a thought albeit dark.

[ETERNITY]

Hi Pete, You doubly inspire me! Probably because there are TWO of you, you and Thoreau. Thanks ;)

[ETERNITY]

THREE counting OZZY!

[ETERNITY]

Take eternity, she waits for whomever will.
She is patient and long suffering, never demanding
comprehensive skill.
She never requires beyond what she finally gets.
She is an author of imagination... come
fall into her gentle nets.

[Pete]

eternity is more than a long time.

[ETERNITY]

yeah, I love this site! it inspires me so much! All youse guys ;)

[ETERNITY]

a mysterious write for sure, Pete,
I can't choose a favorite line because it's all beautiful
Just beautiful!
I, of course, love Sabbath

[Pete]

thanks for the kind thoughts. i don't come across that many people who love sabbath.