Naked Feet

Clarity

I walk on naked feet, got dirt between my toes

Rooted in the earth, I'm part of all that grows

When I communicate, hopefully you'll hear

Messages succinct, opaque, concise and clear

 

I walk on naked feet, got dirt between my toes

Rooted in the earth, I'm part of all that grows

Never shall I speak, verbalize or shout

Words ambiguous, uncertain or in doubt

Author's Note

Some people can call a dog a "cat" and get away with it, but they are very few. Words that make no sense are of no use to me.

Reviews

[ShelleyA]

Hi Samuel. A very good short write about communication, taking part in the world that is short, concise and succinct. Heartfelt and lyrical. Good imagery and descriptives. Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and enjambment. Rhyme is good. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Good depth of feeling. A message of hope and good advice on how we should treat one another, with benevolence. Good word choice as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Well penned. Write on!

[Samuel Dickens]

Thanks again, Shelly. Even though I don't know what I'm doing, I guess I get lucky sometimes.

[ShelleyA]

You're very welcome.

[Diane]

This was different. As always though, it was good.

[Samuel Dickens]

Thank you. Being "real" is very important to me.

[Woody]

oh how true, Sam. you said out loud what I've always thought. what you say here has always been apparent in all your writes. message cristal clear.

[Samuel Dickens]

Thank you, Woody. Yes, I try very hard to convey my messages clearly. It's great to know that I'm successful at it.

[Lady Glitter]

Yep. You're just simple, candid and real. Down to earth, just like this poem illustrates. I like the way it defines a good writer, because to me a good writer is someone who can be understood by many people. Nice rhyming and tempo.

[Samuel Dickens]

Thank you, Sandi, and you understood this exactly the way I meant. Being as I am, I find it very difficult to understand or find any value in so much of the poetry I see on this site. Too many here have nothing of value to say, so they dress it up in layers of meaningless fluff.

[MomzillaNC]

The world is shaped by words. False words create a broken world… the evidence is everywhere across the globe: the world is broken by false words, by dogma.

[Samuel Dickens]

It seems part of my dna to seek that which is clear and honest.

[MomzillaNC]

It think that's true of all of us. My personal experience is that the most inveterate liar will be the most offended to discover anyone being dishonest with them.

[Sue]

I have the same feeling with sand and you have captured that feeling beautifully Samuel :)

[Samuel Dickens]

Thanks, Sue. I try hard to always be understood.

[Renée]

I hang in a tree myself...but dirt between toes works..simple..connected and is, what is says..
a rare poem..(well done btw ) from a great writer...yes Sam that is you !

supercalifragilisticexpialidocious ..oh you know i had to say it ! ( :

[Samuel Dickens]

A tree is good, too. Thanks, Renee.

[SyberRose]

I love this...it gives one such a nice feeling...a nice soulful poem...Rose:)

[Samuel Dickens]

Thank you so much, Rose.

[Frieda P]

Sounds like the lyrics to a country western song, like how you repeated that first line, really hit it home...ha, yes, dogs and cats, sometimes they don't play nice together, but your poem tells it like is, nice one!

[Samuel Dickens]

Thank you, Frieda. I've long had a problem with poems that have no understandable message, but just unassociated, incompatible words that I guess are supposed to look pretty next to one another. All too often, I find it impossible for me to pay someone back.

[Frieda P]

I think at times the message is clear to the poet but doesn't translate well, but I understand where you're coming from Samuel, was my pleasure.

[Samuel Dickens]

You've got a valid point.

[Frieda P]

Ha, I know sometimes things make perfect sense in my head but no one else's....

[Samuel Dickens]

I run into that in my short stories sometimes, when trying to write efficiently and use no more words than are necessary. Many times, most readers will do a bit of filling in and "get it", but then it happens that some don't. When I see that, I'm compelled to make appropriate changes.

[Frieda P]

Let's face it, we all write for ourselves first and foremost, if someone gets it, that's cake...always makes me smile when someone truly gets it, but it's alright if they don't too.