i CAN'T THINK OF A TITLE

Random write up.

I don't want to live
To waste another day
Underneath the shadow of mistakes I made
 Cause I feel like I'm breaking inside
 I don't want to fall and say I lost it all
Cause baby there's a part of me to hit the wall
 Leaving pieces of me behind And I feel like I'm breaking inside.

Reviews

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This sounds like a good song.. you have room to add ..
Mistakes make us who we are so they say.. oh, i must be a mess lol ..
I like this.. reads like a song.. sort of bluesy.. nice writing, Kelly.
I like the title Brandon suggested also..

Chloe

[TheFemininePad]

A somewhat decent poem. I might suggest the working title of "Breaking Within". I would also suggest to write a couple more lines for the poem emphasizing your emotions that you felt from the experience that this poem draws from. This is a good start to what could be a great poem. I would definitely work on it some more.