Lightning

                                      /  /                                 

                                      /  A   /

                                     / bolt as  /

                                    / tall as     /

                                 / the sky     /

                              /  flashes      /

                            /  a bright     /

                          /color across the/___________

                         /  world making the stars shine more,/

                        /  A bolt as big as an oak brings       /

                       /_wonder to many souls as it       /

                                              /reflects in /

    /there eyes,/

                                      / It brings  /

                                     / fear to  /

                                     /  some  /

                                     /and light/

                                     /  to   /    

                                     /more/

                                     /   /

                                     / /

                                     /

 

Author's Note

the end makes sense to me, it's because it causes some elecricity to come on,Benjamin Franklin, and others use the natural light from it.
I tried ten times to fix the shape, but it KEEPS MESSING UP!!!!! i've tried and failed so picture it as a lightning bolt.

Reviews

[Cricket Kidd]

i can see the picture. i like how you worded the last part, it brings fear to some and light to more. i think it is great that even though you aren't very old, you have a talent for words that i have had to work for for about two years, since i was 12.

keep up the good work!

[Lorraine]

What a unique structure. It seems a painful job to organize it this way, although I think it'll look better without all those slashes. I'm pretty sure your readers are smart enough to figure out the shape without those. You have an interesting view on lightning. I've never really thought of giving them any sort of reflection. Nice one.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[P.S I Love You]

I love this poem!!! I like the way you made a picture of a lighting bolt here. :D

[Christina May Shanaberg]

I liked this poem and the lightning picture, even though it would not cooperate. It is very well written!

[A.Lee]

I like this poem. Nicely written and I like the ending lines.

[Manda]

wow this was really creative! this very well done! nicely done once again!

[Aggie Skeleton]

Love the shape, really liked it.

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Good design in this Shape or Concrete poem.. Great contrast in feelings...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara

[επι&alp..]

wow i love how you shaped it like a lighting bolt, thats neat. i like the end part too b/c it has multiple meaning. you have really good word choice and descriptions. great art!

[Manda.Ree]

It does look like a lightning bolt ALL except just that ONE part. NOT BAD>>