Immortality

It is a curse to live forever

To watch loved ones come and go

It doesn't matter your endeavors, 

All relations end in woe.

I have learned from my past

From friends up above

So now I, at last,

Vowed never to love.

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

strange ,many times since i was young i told myself never get too much entangled with anyone..it will hurt for one day you will look back and see he is no more..
i was kind of emotional it took a lot of time to get used to someone suddenly
left forever..there is something wrong with life here..wish i knew
lovely write

[Breanna.Pratt]

I like how the ending of every other line rhymes. It keeps my attention, and left me wanting more. I feel that you could make this longer by going into a little more detail about maybe what you've learned from your past or why you've vowed never to love. You could go into detail about why immortality is a curse, or what makes you believe that it is. I think that if this poem was a stanza or two longer this poem could be even better. What you have right now is great, but this just leaves me wanting more and wanting to know more about you decisions and why you feel the way you do!

[Haley]

really great work. i would have loved to see more! but hey, that's not a bad thing. your writing was very captivating, it simply left me wanting more. keep up the great work, you are clearly a talented artist.