i remember

I remember when the sky wasn’t blue

I remember when the birds didn’t sing

I remember when the weeds over grew

And covered the flowers I planted out back

 

I remember when the clouds weren’t white

I remember when the wind stood still

I remember when you came in to fight

And led in your troops with guns cocked and set

 

I remember their pace

Crushing my flowers

I remember your face

Grinning in malice

I remember that moon

You stuffed in your pocket

Hiding my light

 

No bright

 

I remember when you raided my home

Took a handful of flowers

Tore them to shreds

And left me alone

 

I remember

 

I remember when you came back

Without your crown

I remember when you came back

To visit your hometown

 

I remember when you hugged me as a mother should

 

Like you didn’t just

Burn my tower

Like you didn’t just

Steal my flowers

 

I remember

Like you thought I’d forget

I remember

Like it was yesterday

My eyes still blind

Like it was yesterday

Reviews

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Oh my , such an imaginative poem, taking to task, recalling hurt as if. Awesome rhyming and that's what I expect in poetry. Kudos.

So nice to read from u again, Pleez do review my latest poem too, on suicide, Wud like your thoughts on it.

[AlinaTheCacti]

Great poem, I could 100% visualize the scenes while I read

[Great Aunt Astri]

Well done. I like the changes of format in each verse. I like the impact of the single lines. I like the word pictures you have chosen. And it all contains the passionate feeling so well. Hopefully this poem will be very cathartic to the young lady who wrote it!

[Forevermore]

wow, this is a beautiful piece; this is a very passionate and deeply spoken piece. Your form is absolutely phenomenal, and the emotion is very strongly sensed. I love this :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, this is heavy---the haughty crown some wear until they get it knocked off, then they want forgiveness---too little , too late...

the memory is a sure thing.

[Chris]

Strange how some have "selective" memory towards the past and others have a fully different perception of events - isn't it?

[Serendipity Planet]

Memories you will never forget , good writing