Ghost Girl

A short poem about feeling invisible. Unfortunately, loneliness can have consequences.

She screams aloud and beats the ground,

begging to be seen.

She claws at the black coats that pass her by,

but her fingers are a sinking sheen.

She drops to her knees, and then to her side,

staring, yet seeing nothing.

Tears flow like a sorrowful river,

but she doesn't feel a thing.

She shivers, sighs, and closes her eyes,

as the truth slowly unfurls;

Written "R.I.P.," and "Here She Lies,"

The invisible ghost girl.

Reviews

[Rose Kavanagh]

I can definitely relate to this poem - being relatively quiet and bookish when I was younger made me feel like I didn't exist around the bigger personalities in my classes at school.
You accurately captured the feeling of helplessness that goes along with feeling invisible. Really well written!

[Rachel Anderson]

Thank you! I'm the same way, don't worry. :)

[J.L Hunter]

Few poems strike me as incredibly well written and this one definitely fits the bill. Simply stated and to the point. The last line was as impact-full as it ever could be. Very good read, thank you Rachel. -J.L

[Rachel Anderson]

Thanks so much! I'm so glad you liked it. :)

[Cookie]

Wow, this is surprisingly powerful for such a short poem. I really enjoyed it, it's so sad though!

[Rachel Anderson]

Thank you! It is sad, but it's also true for a lot of people. I'm glad you liked it. :)

[NibbleLove]

Omg this is fantastic. I loved reading it :)

[Rachel Anderson]

I'm so glad you liked it!

[Peter H]

social oppression is truly a terrible thing how we deal with it shows perseverance and fortitude this is a good piece

[Rachel Anderson]

Thanks for the review!

[Rhianne Ney]

I can relate here~!

[Rachel Anderson]

I'm glad! I love writing poems that people can relate to.

[Rhianne Ney]

That's our main purpose (:

[zainul]

Great efforts to depict a common influence of ghosts in our lives.
Such feeling of ghost is ubiquitous and you have addressed it quite perfectly.
Cheers!

[Rachel Anderson]

Thanks!

[zainul]

Welcome:)

[Emily Feret]

Tears flow like a sorrowful river,
But she doesn't feel a thing.

What moving lines I found those to be! Excellent piece

[Rachel Anderson]

Thank you so much!

[Inda]

Beautiful and eerie and yet it's not dark at all. Great piece!

[Rachel Anderson]

Thanks for the review!