The Unknown

When a nightmare feels so real, until you open your eyes and discover it was only a dream.

The Unknown 

The sheets fall in place as her mom's kiss lingers in between the crease of her eyebrows

As the light dissipates so does her connection to reality

She inhales deeply, each exhale unleashing her unconscious mind

Slowly her body goes weak, transcending into a universe that is known only by what she knows and holds dear

Her soul sails across oceans of infinite thought,

breaths labored and heart beats skipped

She walks the plank off into the sea 

raging and turbulent the winds have picked up

She falls, the plunge, the cold and the storm

Sinking and drowning her mind has become, 

a dream…a nightmare, a story to come.

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

whoa!!! it is like a dark damp room where the whole universe exist and a terror stricken mind feeling helpless as it moves towards an unknown path... you certainly took my attention into it... i loved the way it starts with a gentleness....you kept the reader interested throughout the poem....
"Slowly her body goes weak, transcending into a
universe that is known only by what she knows and holds dear" this took the reader to the unknown universe you were talking about.... well done dear frnd... clappings!!!! full ratings....

[Rachel]

Thank you! This is defiantly one of the more deeper pieces I've written. It has a deeper meaning of how slowly we can transcend to a dark world, like a nightmare; when everything seems fine and okay. I'm glad you enjoyed reading it!

[DorothyParker]

I felt every word in this poem. Nightmares and scared sleep leave often strong memories in us.

[Rachel]

Couldn't agree more! Thanks for your feedback! :)

[Stars and Whales]

wow this is very good. I sent you a message about it more.