Sand and Ashes

I am the excruciating heart attack

Breaking

Ocean waves across sand and ashes

A miserable waste of time and space

Beneath my dreams, above my fate

 

Where my abysmal mind awaits

Utopia

Reviews

[Thorn]

Interesting...
I like how you underlined the last word, Aiza. And the use of font throughout the poem gives it a more varied look.

The forth line looks like someone was thinking it, which I also think works well. Good job!