fallen

a look at the heart and you can see pasted the dark

a fallen angel

thats all you are

all broken and scared

but i see the heart

 

you could do so much more

you could sore

but the chain around your neck

makes you different from the rest

 

a heart shattering smile

i havent seen in awhile

a fallen angel

thats all you are

Reviews

[Tasha]

This was really good. I enjoyed.

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

"You could sore"--that doesn't make sense.
This was very nice, although the spelling and grammar brings it down somewhat.

[Amber Tasch]

nice!

[Just a Dream]

really good!!

[SheWhoWillNotBeNamed]

:))) Really nicely done!

[Vanessa Rico]

This was really was touching and beautiful! Love the rhythm and flow! A great piece!

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Really soft and sweet!

[Bailey C. Writing]

I think this is really good. It mentioned the word angel (fallen or not) and I completely love angels, so bonus for that ;) But I think you did beautifully on this :)

[guiltyascharged]

Awwww. Amazingly beautiful. But you should check your grammar and spelling, though. Amazing write, nonetheless!

[☯]

Very nicely written, I loved your use of words. But, I think you meant "shattering" in stead of "shatting" in the last stanza. But other than that, good job. :)