i dare you

read it

my mind is out of its mind

its doing thing i dont do

its thinking i liked you

maybe it true

come on inside

i give you aride

let you see what  i see

let you be me

go though my troubles

i bet you see double

i bet you cant handle it

.......fill my shoes

i dare you......

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Mashairi]

nice work :)

[argentum lumen]

This was an interesting poem. A couple of spelling mistakes "doubble" should be "double" "aride" to "a ride" but other than that it was a good poem. "my mind is out of its mind" was my favorite line and it made me want to read more and the last two lines lingered which I liked.

[Omar Fendri]

beautifully written, short and simple
there are couple grammar mistakes that need to amend :)

[SheWhoWillNotBeNamed]

"let you me" think you might be missing something between "you" and "me"
"go though my trouble " think it's a typo, should be "through"
a really nice dare!

[Tasha]

this is a nice poem.

[The old me]

powerful and overall a great poem

[PaleWriter]

I liked this one. It's got a stong sense of esteem to it that jumps out at the reader and doesn't let go.

my mind is out of its mind
it's doing things i dont do
it's thinking i liked you
maybe it's true
come on inside
i'll give you a ride
let you see what i see
let you be me
go though my troubles
i'll bet you see double
I bet you can't handle it
.......fill my shoes
I dare you......

[☯]

Enjoyed reading it a lot. Good job :)

[Gone]

really good poem

[fireblossom]

Ignoring spelling mistakes, I did that, this is a really good poem. I like the way it sings. Very nice.